Come on. Those edits can't be real? I seriously would not have believed them if you had not screenshot it. First off, your friend's poem is really good. (But I enjoy poetry...so there's that.) I wish you could reveal who it is so I can fall on the "hearth" of this talented maestro. (We poetry people like to confuse others with our dribble.)

I usually am on the side of the editor because most writers can't take feedback, but this time...oh my. It's like a bi-polar failed freshman English teacher ransomed her words.